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The sand blew through the air like baby powder as I walk from the Tarmac to collect my baggage at Baghdad International Airport, soaking into my lungs with years worth of death and the depleted uranium which caused it. I have to admit this was an excited time in my life... the first time I had ever been to an active war zone.
I grabbed my bags and quickly headed inside, catching my next flight to my new home which I would be stationed at for the next year, C.O.B. Speicher. As I get to my new home, I’m told I have 24hrs of rack time before flight training tomorrow, but I could never really sleep with all the excitement. I was always nervous about flying in country, because of the reports of attacks that came in. I heard of the black hawks constantly being shot at and dropping out of the sky, but that was rotary wing and I’m in fixed wing I should be safe... right?
I hop in my plane the next morning, perform a pre-flight check and so we take off. In a war zone you don’t take off like normal planes, you take off like a roller coaster. The goal is to get above 1000ft by the time you hit the wire so that the enemy’s small arms can’t shoot you down. As we exit the wire, I heard a loud “thump thump thump thump thump” like bullets shooting out of the plane. The flares had just fired off, and as I look out the window I see two people firing rifles at the plane. After not having any real sleep or relaxation in the past 24hrs the first words that came out of my mouth were, “Really? Really?? I just effin’ got here!”
The Point: Live every day like it’s your last, because it just might be.
I love the humor. Only thing is you should be a bit mindful of the fact that not everybody is necessarily familiar with your military terms and acronyms.
ReplyDeleteThe story is very engaging. I could picture everything you were saying. I do feel though, that your point would have been more relevant if you had started your story about your plane getting shot at a little sooner, and elaborated on that.
ReplyDeleteI like this a lot. How you illustrate yourself in a war zone, and the feeling you felt while being there. I think that if you describe the terms that you use, example being "the wire" or "C.O.B". Also, I do agree with Ryan, I also think you should put you getting shot at more in the middle and expand on that to end the story.
ReplyDeleteThis is a fantastic story Mike, and is narrated very well and I agree to maybe describe terms a little more but maybe your visuals will do that!
ReplyDeleteNeed help defining the military acronyms,but other than that the story is very interesting and vivid.
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